Monday, July 11, 2011

Is this a boring start to a story?

No actually it was quite suspenseful. I think you did an excellent job describing in full detail this metal capsule. I totally imagined it and can visualize this object just belting out of the sky at an enormous speed. I feel it was a smooth transition from visualizing this object to Sandra in her kitchen. I didn't feel as if I missed out on anything or needed to know more of the object at the time. I was suddenly now involved in what this woman was doing and understanding her actions. I wish there was more to read as I want to know what she does next and what this capsule contains, who heard it if anyone did and so forth. Keep going so far everything sounds good to me. Also if there is more I would love to know how I can read more of this story. Thank you

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